Cience

essay
by Rafael Handal

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MAR 03, 2011 09:51PM

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explain suprt effect

conc /transit

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effect

effect

4GRADEMARK REPORT FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

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1. When you capitalize a person's name, you only need to capitalize the first letter of it. 2. This topic sentence sounds likeyou're starting a summary. An argument should tell what you're going to prove in your paragraph. explain suprt Does this fully explain your support? What effect does your supporting quote have on the storyand on the reader? conc /transit Body paragraphs should either be ended with a concluding sentence or with a transition.
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3. Be careful with the summary. An analytical essay is looking foryou to prove a point, not retell the story. What effect does your supporting quote have on the story and on the reader? What effect does your supporting quote have on the story and on the reader? 4.How do the instances you've cited show honor?

RUBRIC: 6+1 FULL RUBRIC ORGANIZATION Is the paper written with a clear introduction with thesis statement? Do the paragraphs have clear arguments,supports, and explanation?
STRONG (5) EFFECTIVE (4) DEVELOPING (3) EMERGING (2) NOT YET (1)

23 / 35 3/5

Shows control and strength in this trait; many strengths present On balance, the strengthsoutweigh the weaknesses; a small amount of revision is needed. Strengths and need for revision are about equal; about half-way home. Need for revision outweighs strengths; isolated moments hint at whatthe writer has in mind A bare beginning; writer not yet showing any control

IDEAS Do the body paragraphs have clear arguments? Are the arguments supported by appropriate quotations? Is theconnection between the quotation and the argument clearly explained?
STRONG (5) EFFECTIVE (4) DEVELOPING (3) EMERGING (2) NOT YET (1)

2/5

Shows control and strength in this trait; many strengths...